Remembering Summer
We drove out of the city to find peacewinding our way towards Sleepy Hollowknowing our troubles would not followyoung climbers searching for releaseFound the bright green forrest very mellowthe water...
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Hi, and welcome.You seem to be one of those poets who don't like using punctuation. That's fine, if it's your style, but if you're open to the idea of punctuation, this sonnet could use some.Why is it...
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Metrically, this could benefit from some consistency. Some of your lines are pentameter, others tetrameter. Choose one or the other.I don't like the lack of punctuation. It muddles the already muddled...
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Hello,You've already gotten much excellent advice from Yolhanson and Owl. I just wanted to add that you have serious problems with some rhymes, particularly in L5 which should rhyme with L8.February
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Wal-Mart is spelled as you see it here. Question: Is that little R-in-a-circle symbol required for words like Wal-Mart when they are used in a poem? I try to be very religious about this when writing...
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